• JimLotFP
  • Lord of All Fevers and Plagues
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  • Registered: 2009-10-07
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Topic: Death Frost Doom: What Needs to be Fixed for the 3rd Printing?

Fix the map legend.

Add in an extra note in the opening hallway that it travels toward the north, not the east.

Add a note to location #3 that "fresh tooth" means "tooth that has not previously been in a basin" rather than "immediately out of a living mouth."

Add a note to location #22 clarifying/revising what awakens the thing in the pit.

What else is needed? Have you spotted any typos?

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  • Jeff
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  • Registered: 2009-12-18
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Re: Death Frost Doom: What Needs to be Fixed for the 3rd Printing?

Just finished reading the PDF. You sick, sick fuck.

There's an unfinished either/or construction at the bottom of p. 18: "Flipping a coin in will either increase one random ability score (roll d6 to determine which)." The next sentence suggests you should nuke "either."

In general, the text is inconsistent in describing how to remove curse x, y, or z, or how long the effect lasts. Not a problem for most DMs.

The "will suffer a -1/5% penalty" construction is a bit awkward. Instead, how about "will suffer a 5% penalty (-1 on d20)" ?

When you refer to a location key or a chapter title, it couldn't hurt to include a page number reference in brackets.

Some online commenter suggested adding contrast to the shrine map's negative space. I filled the negative space quickly in Photoshop (magic wand tool at 90% tolerance selects grid but not walls) and the legibility gain is HUGE. I can email you a layered PSD file if you like.

That's all that stood out.

Kudos, James, freaky module. :)

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  • Registered: 2009-10-11
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Re: Death Frost Doom: What Needs to be Fixed for the 3rd Printing?

I would recommend flipping the surface map. The maps for the cabin and the shrine both have north to the right, but the surface map has north to the left. I didn't have any trouble determining north on the shrine map, but the transition from the surface map to the cabin map was disorienting.

  • JimLotFP
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Re: Death Frost Doom: What Needs to be Fixed for the 3rd Printing?

Thanks for the help so far.

Jeff wrote:

Some online commenter suggested adding contrast to the shrine map's negative space. I filled the negative space quickly in Photoshop (magic wand tool at 90% tolerance selects grid but not walls) and the legibility gain is HUGE. I can email you a layered PSD file if you like.

Looks like I have a project today! I filled in the negative space for the 2nd printing of the print version (and wiped out the scale and compass points altogether, gakk!), but didn't do that to the pdf since it would make printing it an absolute nightmare. However, there really is no reason I can't simply erase the lines in the negative space and end up with a much better looking pdf map that can still be printed if people want to do that.

I have a project today!

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